I am a poet wrighting of my pain
I am a person living a life of shame
I am your friend actin like I am fine
I am a gurl pushin her tears aside
I am your daughter hiding her depression
I am your sister makein a good impression
I am a student that doesnt have a clue
I am the gurl sittin next to you
I am the one hopin youll be there
I am your best friend askin you to care

Gabrielle McKenze

Okay. Wow.

First of all, this is far too repetative, and not really poetic.

Your rhyming is blase, and the words you've chosen aren't much better. Also, I really can't stand poetry with grammatical errors. You're just making a mockery of yourself. Please ... words ending in "ing" always end in "ing". Spell words right please - especially girl.

This poem lacked depth and ... thought. Think clearly about what you'd like to write about, and dig deep - try to find things that describe your moods and feelings more clearly. Use poetic devices, and make it real.