i know this poem is stupid
please help me imrove it

i was lonely
i was vulnerable
and you took a chance
you said you loved me
but then why
did you kiss
with some whore
a girl you didn't even know
and come back like nothing ever happened
why did you come into my life
and put my heart back together
only to hurt me
when you knew
what i was going through
you came
only to make me
feel worse
to leave me empty
why did i love you? why?
you promised
you would not hurt me
you promised me
you lied
you asshole
how could you!?
HOW COULD YOU!?
i will not be vulnerable
to your hand
i'll beat you
ill will make you feel pain
ill fucking kill you
if i ever see you again
how dare you hurt me
ill make you bleed
ill slit your wrists
would you dare touch me again
with bloody hands
i will make you suffer
the way i did
i will not go in silence
Again
i will not bow down
to you
if i see you again
i promise
i will beat you
you with your
fucking words
would you speak
if i poured poison down your throat
no
i wouldn't dare

i know this poem is stupid
please help me improve it

Try inserting some stanza's. Its a little bit more of a rant at present. So for example, make a space between this line: 'why did i love you? why?' and this line: 'you promised'


you promised
you would not hurt me
you promised me
you lied


Good use of repetition here.


'I will not be vulnerable' - Try capitalising those for emphasis. Eg. I Will Not Be Vulnerable or I will not be Vulnerbale. Either will do. Or placing them in italics. For emphasis.

Eg. No.
I wouldn't dare.

The full stop on the end stops the flow abruptly. And the short sharp sentences pause to convey the tension/anger.

Is this free verse? It looks like it.