Her Many Names

“A loser”
“A faker”
“An outcast”
They hate her
No love
No friends
No pain
Ever ends
The rumors
The lies
The nights
While she cries
Her many thoughts
Her many dreams
Her many wishes
Tore at the seams
They whisper
They see
They know
That girl’s
me

This had good rhythm to it and good use of repitition there. The last line however, could be emphasised more.
Eg. That girl's
Me.
So it has full effect and stops the flow abruptly. 'That girl's me' just wants to make the flow continue. I liked this. Good piece.

This had good rhythm to it and good use of repitition there. The last line however, could be emphasised more.
Eg. That girl's
Me.
So it has full effect and stops the flow abruptly. 'That girl's me' just wants to make the flow continue. I liked this. Good piece.


Thanx Aura Bell! i think ill try that! you're lots of help thanx again!

love Dani C

Awh-I really liked this poem! Plz post more stuff!

Awh-I really liked this poem! Plz post more stuff!

i would but everyone hates my stuff

Then pm them to me!PLZ!!!!!!!!!

I liked it, it was interesting and had a really great flow.

Very well written poem.. I adore the way it sounds when i rea it in my head.. The rythms really good and the text says a lot though you've really only udes few words...
I especially like the ending...

I must have been hit my a spell jinx...
rea = read
udse = used