just thought i'd write a poem for once before the cannabis wears off and i realize i couldnt write a poem that started with "roses are red..."

in a sea of blue fish, there is a city, in this city, i am the bluest.
drone am i for metropolis conquest, a killer of dreams a weaver of lies.
judge not the bluest fish in the sea, judge not one of millions for the lies he seeds.
for there is only one red fish, in the vast and endless place, one who will rise to the surface, choke down fresh air then fall into hell where a red fish belongs.
in a sea of blue fish there is a city, in this city, i am the bluest.

i'm going to wake up tommorow with a headache and a deep regret for writing this.

just thought i'd write a poem for once before the cannabis wears off and i realize i couldnt write a poem that started with "roses are red..."

in a sea of blue fish, there is a city, in this city, i am the bluest.
drone am i for metropolis conquest, a killer of dreams a weaver of lies.
judge not the bluest fish in the sea, judge not one of millions for the lies he seeds.
for there is only one red fish, in the vast and endless place, one who will rise to the surface, choke down fresh air then fall into hell where a red fish belongs.
in a sea of blue fish there is a city, in this city, i am the bluest.

i'm going to wake up tommorow with a headache and a deep regret for writing this.
don’t regret it, i think it was good. Different from alot of poems written on here which is amazing. everyone always complains about reading poems that sound the same and blahh blahh blahh..but they never see these kind of original poems. so its not the problem w/ the peoples poems its the problem with the people making a comment on only the poems they read..blahh if that makes sense?! sorry i just had to get that out....i liked yer poem alot. ask me about you and i could surprise you and tell you what kind of person you are, because of your poem.

I'm sorry man to be so blunt, but that is one of the worst poems I've ever read. You need to go back to school and work on some basic english skills, nothing personal though.

drone am i for metropolis conquest, a killer of dreams a weaver of lies.

^^^^^^^Love this line.

But it would be better if you sorted out the sentence structure maybe. And like Decieving Beauty says, Don't regret it, you had some nice ideas in there, perhaps find an new order for them though. Just a suggestion.

I think it'd be better if u just brought more structure to the lines but other than that I liked it!