Walking upon the earth

Walking in the dark

Sensing people around me

Yet feeling so alone

I’m just confused

I’m just lost

Knowing only knowledge

Not understanding a thing



Still I stumble onwards

Trying to reach something

Something that will help

Help shed a light upon the earth

And to show me the way

The route to take out of here



Still I’m stumbling onwards

The future for me unclear

Don’t know if I will reach that something

Don’t know how far away it is

Don’t know just how long

How long it will take to reach it

If I will ever get there

The future unclear to me



i'd luv to hear comments....

Some good use of incremental repetition, the imagery is very vague but maybe that was the intention to put across the point of the future beiing unclear. Still, not bad. Not bad. The last line needs an 'is' inserted in there. Its a tad melancholy.

thanks... yupp.. i am pretty hopeless at grammar so yeah...