Sorry for filling this board up with so many crappy poems, but one of my friends told me to post this poem here.

A loss of hope
A loss of grace
Empty on love
With a world to face
Now face the guns
That hunt you down
Don’t try to run
Don’t take the crown
Power is evil
But is hard to refuse
Something once happened...
But that is old news
Old news doesn’t matter
It is in the past
Keep your eyes on the future
And run really fast
For the pace of life now
Is so very up-beat
That you can’t take a break
You must keep to your feet

You don't have to comment on it, just read it.

Sorry for filling this board up with so many crappy poems, but one of my friends told me to post this poem here.

A loss of hope
A loss of grace
Empty on love
With a world to face
Now face the guns
That hunt you down
Don’t try to run
Don’t take the crown
Power is evil
But is hard to refuse
Something once happened...
But that is old news
Old news doesn’t matter
It is in the past
Keep your eyes on the future
And run really fast
For the pace of life now
Is so very up-beat
That you can’t take a break
You must keep to your feet

You don't have to comment on it, just read it.

ill comment on it, you deserve that much, i thought it was choppy, what are you trying to say in this poem?? i read it over and over and you had little bits of everything thrown together to sorta mean nothing at the end...
the underlined words, didnt work at all...once again seemed rushed and choppy.
keep writing though, and im glad ur back havent read anything from you in a while!! ;)