I Cry
Sometimes when I'm alone I Cry, Cause I am on my own. The tears I cry are bitter and warm. They flow with life but take no form I Cry because my heart is torn. I find it difficult to carry on. If I had an ear to confiding, I would cry among my treasured friend, but who do you know that stops that long, to help another carry on. The world moves fast and it would rather pass by. Then to stop and see what makes one cry, so painful and sad. And sometimes... I Cry and no one cares about why.


wot do you fink ov it :cry:

It kinda sucks.

thank you

Is it a poem...?

It seems very jumbled and makes no sense when written out like that. Also, you seem to repeate yourself an awful lot, I like the idea of wondering what makes people cry...but it needs to be thought about a bit more carefully.

I Cry
Sometimes when I'm alone I Cry,
Cause I am on my own. The tears I cry are bitter and warm.
They flow with life but take no form
I Cry because my heart is torn.
I find it difficult to carry on.
If I had an ear to confiding,
I would cry among my treasured friend,
but who do you know that stops that long,
to help another carry on.
The world moves fast and it would rather pass by.
Then to stop and see what makes one cry,
so painful and sad.
And sometimes... I Cry
and no one cares about why.


wot do you fink ov it :cry:

you need to write it out like that, or however you prefer

i LIKE IT

I liked it but it needs more structer in the flow and the lengh of the lines.

you want to know what i think of it? i think that its pretentious, self obsessed nonsense. seriously, you 'depressed' people really need to get over yourselves or get something to actually be sad about instead of pouring this kind of shit out.

you want to know what i think of it? i think that its pretentious, self obsessed nonsense. seriously, you 'depressed' people really need to get over yourselves or get something to actually be sad about instead of pouring this kind of shit out.

jerk, some people actually have DIAGNOSIBLE problems, man, you're not intelligent.

oh god, you're right. some people get sad over nothing! how was i so blind to miss that?

THATS NOT HER POEM
THATS A FUCKIN 2PAC POEM
stupid ho
took his writing

OMG and u guys say it sucks
no it doesnt

good job sarahjane002 u ruined a perfectly good poem

i did not mean 4 people to say that it sucks did i

well ok yea no u didnt
sorry...lol for bein mean
got caught up in the moment

but im just sayin

ok then

but still using some elses work
and people here wouldnt understand what Tupac had to say anyways
i still think what u did was stupid

is ur name really sarahjane......

you want to know what i think of it? i think that its pretentious, self obsessed nonsense. seriously, you 'depressed' people really need to get over yourselves or get something to actually be sad about instead of pouring this kind of shit out.
u noe that this chic has writen some other poems and if u bothed to read them the maby u would find out that her dad hurt her alot when she was young and she is still getting over that. u dont need a reaion to be depressed its a cemical emblance in the brain.and yes i noe that i cant spell but who gives a fuck. u are a compleate arsehole if u dont want to read this kinder stuff then go and read all the poems about friking pink fluffy bunnys and have fun living in ur deluded world where everything is perfect and there are no people who are as you so nicely put it pretentious, self obsessed.
anyway
keep up the good work of being a complete arse hole ur doing a great job