called your house hoping youd pick up,
left a message asking you whatsup,
leaving you my heart on your fone,
told you i didnt like to be alone,
I cried that i was sorry and was feeling bad,
told you i wanted everything back that we had,
told you i miss the way you smiled at me,
you were the only guy who could make me happy,
i hung up the fone, since it wasa machine i was talking to,
and i really only wanted to be talking to you,
sat in my room wondering where you could be,
wondering if you were with a girl who replaced me,
than i heard a loud knock at the door,
walked faster than i ever had before,
cuz i was curious who it would be at this time at nite,
preying it was you but didnt think i was right,
answerd the door, and who could it be,
it was you and you were staring at me,
you told me you wanted it back like before,
told me you couldnt stand being alone anymore,
told me it was stupid that we ever got in a fight,
told me youve never loved anyone but me on this night,
than I woke up from this day dream,
noticed i was still talking on the machine,
and you werent there and you were mad at me,
tears poured from my eyes constantly,
i made the mistake it wasnt your fault at all,
BUT i wish you'd get my message and call,

oh that was good..suprised me on the ending alot

thanks.

yeah thats good..... yep the ending surprised me too.. i was so happy for you for one moment there.

uhm...
well..you need to spell check and grammar check. it's not "fone" it's "phone."
you get going on a rhythem, and then you throw it off without starting a new stanza.
in fact..your poems never have stanzas...i like stanzas, you should try 'em.
i don't like rhyming, though, but whatever.
it's okay. not really my thing.

i like it alot! i can relate alot! my dreams are so live like that when i wake i cry cause what i want is for my dreams to come true

It's cool. There was a bit of an overuse of commas, you could have done with ending the line and few times. Maybe even adding a few adjectives, but not too many?

the classic waking up from a dream ending...personally i find it over used...but your poem was alright.