"A film noir love story."

From Richmond to D.C and every girl in between.
I've left a trail of broken hearts.
Mine being the worst.
Broken in two, from words said by you.
Broken by myself, and all that I put me through,
trying to please you, and give you your's.
May I have some of my own,
something to call myself, my sanity?
No, you cannot have mine.
Ok, take it, but it's the best i can give,
so live long and prosper,
but don't let your days become numbered.

Good?

yes? no?

maybe?

i liked it..not too long,not too short,believable,understandable and real...congrats on a job well done

it wasnt good, it wasnt bad, it was pretty good/alright...i liked it though.