This is a potential song that I aim to play on my, you guessed it, guitar
Please tell me what you think and where I should improve!“Faze”Chorus:
The notes shatter from the page
Collapse and wither of old age
I feel like I am in a daze
I really hope it’s just a phase

I hear a sound of electric guitars
Pounding, pounding from afar
I hope, I pray that they’ll see me
And I will finally be free

They come closer and disappear
But I still see them crystal clear
I painted my brown guitar red
And now play music from the dead!!

Chorus:
The notes shatter from the page
Collapse and wither of old age
I feel like I am in a daze
Let’s all hope it’s just a phase

Louder, louder, louder I play
For every note my eardrums pay
But it makes it all worthwhile
I’m letting go of all that bile

Screaming, chocking but not dead
My music notes follow me to bed
And whisper to me as I lay down
That for rock and roll I’m bound

Chorus:
The notes shatter from the page
Collapse and wither of old age
I feel like I am in a daze
I’m really doubting it’s a phase… :dj: :banghead:

Some decent parts in there. 'crystal clear' slightly cliché phrase there
but 'twas good =)

thanx, it's an overused phrase, I know (crystal clear that is)