:cry: [FONT=Arial Black]Alone[/FAloneONT]

She's all alone as she walks out the door,
the pain that shes been through she cant take anymore.
She stops and looks back on the house that is there,
but turns away from the memories she cant bear.
Far away she will go from the ppl shes been hurt by.
She needs to find a better place where shell no longer have to cry.


Poem i made while bored.Pls tell me what u think. O and in the pic im the one in red.

That is the opposite of good! :)

the song of the same name by Heart is soo much better... and i hate 80's music
ok:
cliche, overused, and abused theme
poor flow, almost sounds like u tried to use meter, but quit halfway through, cuz u kept putting in extra syllables, which throughs of the iambic, which i think this is supposed to be, if u change meter in iambic always do it in increments of a whole iamb aka unstressed stressed
well... thats it then

I REALLY LIKE IT. ITS LIKE STARTN' NEW AGAIN AND LEAVEN' THE PAST BEHIND. I LOVE IT. DORY09

the song of the same name by Heart is soo much better... and i hate 80's music
ok:
cliche, overused, and abused theme
poor flow, almost sounds like u tried to use meter, but quit halfway through, cuz u kept putting in extra syllables, which throughs of the iambic, which i think this is supposed to be, if u change meter in iambic always do it in increments of a whole iamb aka unstressed stressed
well... thats it then

Agreed too.
It is overused, try bringing in some original touches, and add the necessary apostrophes.