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DragonIreth
07-26-2005, 05:49 PM
another part of the story I started... it's a little later on .... i skipped stuff

Nadarius quickly turned, just in time to see a girl launching at him, a knife in her hand. He ducked but was a second too late as her fist connected with the side of his face. He stumbled back for a moment then growled unintelligably under his breath and pulled out his sword. For a moment she went still, staring at him, and he cursed under his breath. She was a shifter. Suddenly a hunting cat was leaping toward him, he lifted the sword, slicing across it's front leg but not seriously injuring it. Again a girl stood there and he took his chance, lunging toward her, his knife dragging across her leg as he grabbed her arm and pulled it up behind her. If he could immobilize her he could keep her from being able to shift.

He dug around in his waist pouch and she started thrashing against him. He pulled out a small needle filled with a paralyzing venom made for capturing prisoners and stuck it into her arm. She instantly went still and Nadarius rubbed the side of his face with his hand. Looking up at the stormy sky he sighed. He wasn't a killer, it was about to snow heavily, and he wouldn't be able to just leave her to die. He threw her over his shoulder and carried it to a cave nearby. Luckily a deer crossed his path and he shot it with an arrow. He deposited the shifter in the cave and went and retrieved the deer and some firewood. By the time he got back it was snowing heavily and the girl was twitching slightly, still not able to move much.

*grins* I'll leave it at that...

there... I changed it a little...

talented_fighter
07-26-2005, 05:55 PM
good job with the edits i liked the snake thing but they both work very well.

xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
shy baby girl

DragonIreth
07-26-2005, 05:58 PM
thank you... i decided that I liked the cat part better so i just got rid of the snake... it was pretty pointless anyway i guess

babygurl_Tay
07-26-2005, 06:23 PM
I like this story so far keep writting. I want to see how the girl is going to react afterwards, will she kill him?

DragonIreth
07-26-2005, 06:34 PM
no... *grins* but she'll try once or twice I think...