My mind is a mass of jumbled thoughts
Can't focus on anything
Can't understand what is going on
Inside my head

Floating in the darkness
Of my soul
Swirling colors collide
Showering me with glimmering light

Tumbling head over heels
Can't realize which end is up
Always dizzy, always confused
Don't know where I am

Or who I am
I need to find myself in the
Endless void
Of my mind

:pink: Rachel Young

...ookayy...well, once again, this is a dashing try at poetry, but you lack basic structure and ryme, as well as rythm...It has somewhat of imagery but really elaborate on what your feeling and seeing. It wasn't to bad, i'll give it a 2 out of 5.

Likewise Zera has commented, it has some simplistic imagery, though this could be reinforced if you wanted to link it to like a Library idea. But it was pretty good, could do with some more detail. Lovely ending as well.

it was imagintive the stucture could have been a little better but its good. i should save htat in case u have to write one in school



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shy baby girl