Hold it in
Bleed it out
Cut again
The blood's run out

The world is cold
Full of jealousy and hate
There's no turning back
The blood's the bait

It's got me hooked
I just can't stop
The beads of crimson form
The blood bubbles start to pop

The blood drips down my leg
The liquid relief runs to the floor
It all sinks in
The tears start to pour

What have I done
I'm not okay
Suicide sinks in
I drift away

One, crimson is used WAY too much for cutter poems, use a different word, get a thesaurus please. Liquid relief, cliche. And suicide is just cliche now. As is cutting. The word razorblades just makes my head ache with how many times I have heard it. It is like it's recorded and someone is holding the recorder up to my ear. Rewinding and pressing play. Make it stop or make it original. Try to make something that you think no one has heard before and something that will blow us away

Another one. Its good maybe you are starting to pour out how you feel. To bad people don't understand that some attend to write about truth facts about their lives.

Yeah. When ever I get in a bad mood or something happens, I start writing. Thats probably why all my poems are depressing and crappy

Yeah. When ever I get in a bad mood or something happens, I start writing. Thats probably why all my poems are depressing and crappy
Your poems aren't crappy! Sad yeah but when you are sad your poems are going to turn out sad too. I like them though and you should continue to write. PLEASEEEEEEEEE :D

I have a spiral notebook full of nothing but poems. But I dont think any of them are really good. And I cant stand it when people say bad things about my stuff. I cant take critisism when it comes to my poetry. Im really sensitive about it. I dont want ot post soem of them because of what people would say

Again you shouldn't worry about what people say about you or your poems. You are expressing the way you feel your way and no one can do that better then you can. Belive it or not your poems can help many other people undertstand what they are feeling and see that they aren't the only ones going through these depressing times. It great that you can write down how you are feeling and put it into a poem many people can't do it...I use to be able to but I lost the desire to write. Sarah you can touch alot of people with your words. So write and share.

wow with each poem i read of yours it keeps getting better and better. I wish i could write like you your really good i never read anything like these before. And if you ask me i like sad poems better than happy happy ones because there more imforative on what is going on and they have so much more feeling. But sometimes its hard to find those kinds of poems. But you have a gift use it. :top:

I have a spiral notebook full of nothing but poems. But I dont think any of them are really good. And I cant stand it when people say bad things about my stuff. I cant take critisism when it comes to my poetry. Im really sensitive about it. I dont want ot post soem of them because of what people would say

Hey - Don't let critisism put you down, I mean its only some advice on ways to improve your works, if you wanted to improve them. When I first started writing, I used to keep excersize books of odd poems, and during school I was very sensitive. I just wanted to say, don't let criticsm stop you from writing, ever. If you have a poem or a couple of stanza's minimum, then your works might not seem as bad as you think they are through another person's perspective.

I'm waffling. I should stop, I just wanted to say that though. :)

I think it was really good, I write alot of poems but I don't think any of them are good or at least as good as that one

I didnt think any of mine where any good either. I still dont. Post some of yours anyways.