Float with me on the currents in the air
Be carried away by the surge of sweet love and lust
Desire.

Stare into the scarlet sky
The phenomenon of God’s grace defined in one moment
Beauty.

Ride on the waves of sanity
Serene Blues and teals in front of your eyes
A sea of saneness.

Lay on the grass beside me
The sun radiating on your already tanned skin
Can you feel the warmth?

Let me wrap your arms around you in the dark of night
Banish the cold back into the abyss
Bliss.

I like it even though parts of it confused me a little. like... Ride on the waves of sanity
Serene Blues and teals in front of your eyes...i dont get it. but over all it was good

Loved it steph. Just loved it.

Whoa, nothing to improve? COOL!

Whoa, nothing to improve? COOL!

None whatsoever :D

yay!!!!!! Me feels special *hugs self* I think that is my first one you couldn't improve! Yay, I win, lol.

I like it even though parts of it confused me a little. like... Ride on the waves of sanity
Serene Blues and teals in front of your eyes...i dont get it. but over all it was good

agree ;)

How come you guys don't get the Ride the waves of sanity, etc. part? It's a love poem with a kind of nature/beachish type theme. I think I meant(I'm not sure, it just came to me) That I keep him sane, and then the colors and all are for the theme and visualization.

lol. Yup. :)

That part was my fav, the ride the waves of sanity, linked neatly in with the sea of saneness. Visualisation works well with this kind of style, I tend to use visualisation in most of my poems when I can.

I love your poems Aura, they paint beautiful pictures ^_^;

Is this free verse? Or some form of Haiku?

I can't really get in to either...

Soory.

Eh, thank ye steph. I love your poems! Short, but fulfilled with meaning. >.> Me, I tend to go into detail though it depends which kind of style, whether a narrative, descriptive or story like work. :shrug:

Might be free verse, it can't be haiku, the syllable thingy

Hmmm... well, I'd like to see some meter, but the words get a 9.

Good work.

Your poems do seem kinda like stories, a lot of the time, Aura

Yay, I have talent, whoo hoo

Yeap. Most of them are based on thoughts/brainwaves story-like plots. Only a few times I tend to hide stuff behind the lines though. I read too much :)

Lol, at least you can read ^_^; reading is good, oh yes.

Loved it, though it seemed as if the third and fourth stanzas were forced into the midst of the poem. I got the feeling you were trying to define the words in the thrid line of each stanza (except stanzas three and four). And, you did a lovely job of expressing these words in a mere sentence. The poem was definitely beautifully written, I just found stanzas three and four to throw off the feeling you were going for; they seemed a little out of place. But, you did a very good job with the wording and conveying of emotion, for the most part.
God Bless...

Lol, at least you can read ^_^; reading is good, oh yes.

Oh yup. Its only recently, in 'For Old Time's Sake' that I've managed to get the plot succesfully unfolding through the poem. A Woman in Berlin's been reprinted, I ought to read that, not usually interested in diaries though. Reading is certainly good. >.>
:)