This has been posted before, but I put all my new poems up and I havn't been on in a whil I thought I might as well get some fresh views on this piece

Graceful, Dark, no surrender
the light doth pierce me sleek and slender
Power surging meek and small
The weak have empowered me enthralled

Evil waning, precipice
sure to save the dawning bliss
The twin monster flying
To save the hero dying

Lord, the almighty failing,
calling to his child stop
Water cleansing Yin for Yang
The good and evil struggle...

mmm. Could do with a few more blue association links in there. I don't think you need the 'doth' in there though. Also, 'Lord' - the Almighty failing'. And perhaps emphasize the 'Stop,' a bit.

There is not supposed to be any emphasis on blue at all. The Blue Shadow is a being, a person. This is his story, not a description of him as he currently is.

Doth adds to the Old-Testament feel to the piece, and 'Lord, the Almighty failing' shows that God is failing at his purpose and is unable to control his creations, and yet the poem shows that all will work itself out in time anyway, regardless of whether or not God helps