*I think this is one of my best in awhile, so comments are greatly appreciated. Thanks! ;) *

Broken tears still wet my eyes,
as I lie awake and alone.
I think of you,
and what was said,
and how stupid I must've been,
to loose everything I had,
just because of my pride.

I should've listened;
should've cared;
should've charished the times we shared,
but, instead, I broke your heart,
and told you lies.

...And on the days I see your face,
and the memories come back,
I wish you would forgive me,
as I apologize for the tenth time.

You should've tried to understand,
that night we spoke while holding hands.
You should've at least helped me wipe the tears,
strewn from my eyes.

...And as my friends say to let go,
and you move on, as I try to.
I still wish that you could hear my fragile plees.

We shouldn't argue;
shouldn't fight,
because we know this isn't right,
but the love we had still haunts us both,
within our sleep.

God Bless,
Keri :pink:

awww... dats sad... but nice... mmm i like it :)

I thought you did a great job of expressing the emotions...I loved it..Good Job

~Ashley

aww...thanks

Thanks and God Bless,
Keri

hi there, your poem is so beautiful in terms of meaning in it and the sounds. the rhymes are so rhythmic. good job!!

Good work . Don't think you need the ellipsis at the beginning of the stanzas.

omg that was a very beautiful poem!!! i loved it u did a great job showing the emotions u felt. good job.

Wow! I thought I did a good job, but I didn't expect such wonderful reactions to it!

Thanks and God Bless,
Keri

not my fav type of poetry... good none the less. i Dislike the last line it didnt give the poem justice

I loved the flow of this poem! The subtle rhyming between stanzas, inside of lines, in random places makes it very interesting to read. I was skeptical while reading it if it was going to have a point, or if it was just a meaningless love poem, and I was wrong. The way you tied it together in the last stanza makes the whole thing worthwhile to read :) The only thing is that there are a few spelling errors (loose>lose, plees>pleas). But that's fixable. Amazing job.

Yeah, I've never used a rhyme scheme like this before, but I think it turned out okay!

Thanks and God Bless,
Keri