a poem i worte when i got bored litreally bout 10 seconds ago so its not the best i can do....

my dying day
who said life was blis, a dream or a strole
keep in time or you will go
from the high mountain top
to the prestin ocean
where you will lie
paused from all motion

in this did that i will see
i sing all in intagroty
my mind says im stupid
my heart says live on but it seems to me your moving on
i followed your footsteps to the shore
where i could now see no longer go on

as was pridicited i would lie
to the bottom of the presctin ocean
paused from all motion
lost all of site
and buried with my soul alive

(i apollogise for all spelling mistakes)

please tell me sum critisism or something like....

Wow, learn to spell. You don't need to apologize for them, just use a freaking spell checker. It isn't that hard.

dont be to harsh with your criticism

i really liked it keep on writing

it rocked..keep it up..peot to poet :)

thankyou i know im a rubbish speller i dont do them on a word document i write them as i go along