All along the midnight coast,
I see the horrid waves of black.
Reaching up as if to boast ,
about lives they’ve taken back...

Without the hint of salt on the air
or gulls crying up above
the cold breeze flows through my hair
as the water drowns with love

Without such life I no longer want
to live out here in strides
her ghost still moans just to haunt
as I mourn within the tides...

i loved this piece, it was an interesting poem, i didnt know it was a love poem at first. there was one line i didnt like really, the flow just wasnt there

"Without such love I no longer want"

it seems too soon to use love again because it was in the previous line

It has the essence of darkness, its interesting. Calming to me really. but thats just me.

I loved the first two stanzas, but i dont think you should have come out in the third stanza with blatant love, you should have kept that vague and open for interpretation

thanks for your comments people, im changing it as you comment... really helping me out... i appreciate it...

def much better... love it now lol

Are you a dark tower fan by any chance?

Who was it you lost?

Shit. I hate that phrase, they say that..'i'm sorry for your loss'......Like you do car keys or your best hat. They don't know it's your soul.

Who did I lose? I think that topic is irrelivent and something no one here really wants to know...