The Perfect One

He holds me when I start to cry...
makes me smile with just his eyes...
shares my hopes, dreams, and fears...
wipes away all my tears...
I love him without regret...
I just haven't found him yet.

OMG. I LOVE this poem.... you did a GREAT JOB. This poem was so sweet. I love it. :)

oh and i dont think you need to change anything... its awesome. i wanna read some more of your work.

I thought it was bad. It was cliche, for one thing, and for another, it was 5 words long. This poem is not insightful and cool enough to be so short. Learn about metaphor. It's a useful tool for good writers.

Mediocre. And I pretty much agree with fiyakrakah.

I thought it was bad. It was cliche, for one thing, and for another, it was 5 words long. This poem is not insightful and cool enough to be so short. Learn about metaphor. It's a useful tool for good writers.

Are you serious?? OMG! You and asskickery have no business even considering critisizing poetry. YOur just not good at it and your advice is misleading and it's everything EXCEPT helpful and respectful. You guys give critics a bad name.


I thought your poem was great. Keep up the good work and never lsoe sight of your dreams and keep searching for that special osmeone. I'm sure you'll find him

And you're saying you have a good name as a critic? Have you read your own poetry? It's horrible.

How do you know I'm not good at poetry?

I REALY LIKE THIS PEOM IT IS REALY NICE AND TOATLY SWEET :pink:

And you're saying you have a good name as a critic? Have you read your own poetry? It's horrible.

How do you know I'm not good at poetry?


Your not suppose to make some one feel shitty just because you didnt like what they wrote. Every one has their own different styles of writing. And YES I have read my own poetry and their quit good actually. How would you know that they were horrible..I've only posted one you fuckin moron. Why dont you post a poem for once and let the "critic" be critisized...see if you can handle it.