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hotaud01
02-23-2005, 06:52 PM
People everywhere
you are not afraid
then their gone
and the fears on
things are gone then there
not even a care
why can't they stay
forever today

I kicked, I screamed, and yelled
in this wide open field
no one there, here, anywhere
than I get scared
why are we scared when we are together
we stay like that forever
friends don't stay family goes away
never to return till my day

There is silence then noise
they are never poise
I hear them coming then disappear
why can't I make this clear
do I want them here or want them gone
or am I lost till the break of dawn
there is no guidence there is no help for me
for what I have to do I can not see

asskickery
02-23-2005, 07:08 PM
The title was a red flag. The rhymes suck. This is not an interesting poem at all.

Freakout2
02-23-2005, 10:11 PM
when you write "and the fears on" it doesn't really make sense. i think it would be more understandable if you wrote "and the fear goes on"