its all about
askin questions
conversations at the park
hearts racin in the dark
creepin
keepin those seekin
answers about us
arms length apart
from us and OUR secrets
'cause thats how WE keep it
its all about
touchin, leanin close, and
carressin
ya hand on my back while
im layin on ya chest and
this moment takes my breath and
im speechless to the point
where the silence turns me on
and i cant explain the high
and the flight that you put me on
goes straight to the moon
and there's nobody there
but me and you
its all about
the little arguements and
the little fights
ringin my phone number
late at night
singin my song to me and
feelin right
its all about
the REAL reason i wright
its all about
love, lust and life
ENOUGH SAID.


BABYBLUE_PLATNUM
AKA
BUTTYR
FEBRUARY 2005

It blinded me!

It disgusted me! You're a terrible poet.

It's all about you shutting the hell up because you can't write. You suck.

Well...

I felt like you got a little trigger happy with the 'Enter' key. And since the poem is of a sensual nature, I felt when reading it an aggressive edge. Sort of like a cynic trying to do his best impersonation of an optimist...it just seemed a bit "put on," if you will. But keep writing and I'm sure you'll improve with time.

Doubtful.

I agree.

TO EVERYBODY....

if you are white, i wouldnt expect you to understand my wrighting anyway. ya just aint up on my style. have a nice day!!!

real poets don' criticize other poets,....they respect them,but your not a real poet...........so.......,um....hmmmm........you don't count! you *** ass writer!,or should i say
oooooh i love how you kisseth thyne asseth you dumb fuck!!!

the only thing i'm doubting is that you have a full vocabulary?

Wow, you're racist. I don't understand your writing, and I don't know what the hell your "wrighting" is, but I'm partially white, so I suppose I won't try to figure it out.

Of course I'm not "up on your style." It sucks. I doubt anyone is.

Actually real poets DO criticize others. There are many real poets in this forum, and they are here to help other poets improve.

By calling anyone a "*** ass writer" you're being prejudice, and you're just making yourself look bad, you douche.

I don't think you are really one to talk about having a full vocabulary when you have to resort to stupid vulgar insults, because you think it hurts anyone who doesn't like your poety...a.k.a. anyone with common sense and/or taste.

You call that writing? It's nothing short of a literary abomination.

Yes you are the man I wish you all the best in poetry you can do it

What the hell is that supposed to mean?

The Sweet Kiss of Love.
Like the soft wing of a Dove.
with the tender feeling of every touch.
that is when i know i love u this much
nothing will change in life but this
your the only one i want to kiss
that is why i say love is like a dove

Oh man, I'm crying with laughter here.

The Sweet Kiss of Love.
Like the soft wing of a Dove.
with the tender feeling of every touch.
that is when i know i love u this much
nothing will change in life but this
your the only one i want to kiss
that is why i say love is like a dove

Why the hell did you put this peom here?

I think I know of a white rapper by the name of Eminem. I do believe he kicked every other rapper's ass in sales of both records and shows for more than four years. Suck it.