Do you truly love me?

I know you love me, you told me so
With fiery eyes and face aglow.
You swore to keep our love anew
with just a call a day, or two.

The kiss was sweet, but full of sorrow
We would not be together tomorrow.
I had to leave, 'twas my duty,
And yet the evening was full of beauty.

I'm still in love, and full of hope
Until we meet again, I can cope
Because you promised you would call,
And shall take my sorrow all.

The day is over, the phone is still
You said you'd call, and I know you will.
You're just busy, I can wait
I know you love me at any rate.

The week flies by, no calls yet
How could you possibly forget?
Maybe I don't mean much to you,
Why won't you take the time to get through?

My heart is dying in my chest
I swore our love, but at the best
I'll try to keep the hope alive
But love, sans loving, can't survive.

Months pass by, my heart grows cold,
The idea of our love seems very old
You likely hate me, I laugh at our kiss
I was stupid to believe in this.

I went to the market to buy some bread
But found you standing there instead
You were in town, just passing thru
Didn't expect to be seeing you

You tried to kiss me, I pulled away
And asked how you could act that way
You never called, it's easy to see
You didn't truly fall in love with me

Your eyes are sadly laughing
My heart freezes when you say
"I've always loved you, but you forgot
To give me your number that day."


Bum Bum Bum..I'm nutty..and sarcastic..anyways, Critques? Comments? Anything?

why do you rhyme? i like free verse way more, because ryhming doesnt always make sense!

Because, Rhyming gives the poem more of a classic feel in my opinion, I like it better. I have some free verse..but..I find I'm better at rhyming ones.

well i like your poem alot, its all rhyming in general....most of it doesnt make sense

Not exactly, the poem tells a story. The rhymes are just there to give it more of a classic poem feel, because that's how I like it. So..yeah.

No one else?..No one else wants to comment anything?..Phoo..

well i like your poem alot, its all rhyming in general....most of it doesnt make sense
Perhaps it doesn't make sense to you, but it certainly means something, at least to the person who wrote it. And this poem made perfect sense, anyway.

The only thing that really bugged me was
And shall take my sorrow all.

"All my sorrow" just seems so much more natural.

I did like it though. It had a nice lighthearted ending.

well...i liked it...the whole rhyme thing doesnt bother me. so...i did like it.

i dont like poems but you get a lot of emotions out that way

The only thing that really bugged me was


"All my sorrow" just seems so much more natural.

I did like it though. It had a nice lighthearted ending.

I did it that way purely for the rhyme, "All my sorrow" didn't fit there with the rhyme so I flipped it around a little and finished the rhyme.

And Thanks for those who liked it :pink: love ya' all.

Do you truly love me?

I know you love me, you told me so
I think you just answered your own question. This part deemed the rest of the poem pointless.

one time my father milked a donkey

Well done. Sacrifice the poem for the rhyme. Good job. A very intelligent choice.

I didn't like it. It bored me.

I think you just answered your own question. This part deemed the rest of the poem pointless.

Sure, I guess you didn't read through the rest of the poem. I find your comment to be of a comical notion, thanks for the laugh.

And fiyahrakah, I didn't sacrafice the poem for the rhyme, I actaully like it better that way. And I'm sorry if it bored you, but that's your own opinion. I like it, but it's my own work so yeah.

Sure, I guess you didn't read through the rest of the poem. I find your comment to be of a comical notion, thanks for the laugh.Actually, I did read the rest of the poem, and thank you for the laugh.

wow, i really liked that poem, it brought a tear to my eyes, you have good rythem, i like it. keep up the good work!:)

hmm nice poem:) its so gd id steal it and tell the person i like that i worte it for em:) dun worry tho...i wun;)