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me_myself_and_i
12-30-2004, 02:17 PM
I am the status quo central of the world,
Nothing but the wether ever changes,
Same old people, same old places,
Same old names, same old faces.

Why can't something dramatic ever happen?
Same old deaths,
Same old disasters.

A new name, a new face,
always welcome,
to take me away from this gormless daze of a life.

Is this it?
Is this the rest of my life?
To sit here in silence until it happens ...

Aibohphobia
12-30-2004, 02:23 PM
Don't use the word "gormless". It's a terribly unpoetic word to begin with, but considering that all the other words you used were much more simple and direct, something like that sticks out way too much.

Other than that, it's decent.

in_my_igloo
12-30-2004, 06:13 PM
I like it. It's thought-provoking, and the final line possesses an intriguing, cryptic quality. However, with regard to the word "gormless", I agree with Aibohphobia - it does seem rather out of place.

Thanks for posting.

me_myself_and_i
01-02-2005, 04:03 PM
sorry, could you suggest (spelling) a different word ?

hotcanadianfeh
01-02-2005, 04:52 PM
How about dull? That's what gormless means anyways.