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Perfect Imperfection
11-12-2004, 03:18 PM
Darkness fills the outer world and darkness fills my heart. It's hard to believe that only one hour ago I was full of joy and of happiness; looking forward to the night.

Since she left my side
For the night
I feel emptiness and pain.

The second hand on the clock mocks me as it slowly rotates 360 degrees completing another minute that makes up another of these long hours.

Everytime she leaves my side
Whether it be for a minute, a day, or a week
The the emptiness and pain come back again.


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Just written on the spot. I wasn't really looking to do anything except get how I feel across. I doubt it's any good, but hey, if you have taken the time to read it, take a few more seconds and tell me what you think...

*nem_szeretsz*
11-12-2004, 04:29 PM
I liked it.

Aibohphobia
11-12-2004, 04:36 PM
Decent. With some editing it could be pretty good, I'd imagine. Pretty good for unprepared on-the-spot work.

bone 4 eva
11-12-2004, 08:38 PM
yeah..i liked it...my favourite peice is the second part..lol:)