I Remember Everyone told me you was bad for me
That you would hurt me
But I didn't listing .
I Put my trust In your hand
in believe you
would never let me down

You had me believe that
They was just hating
And all i need Is you
So i let All my friends go
And stayed with you

But before i could look around
you was gone
GONE ..with first time
In my heart Too
And all i had here with me Is a breaking heart
and no friends To run too

I wish i could go back in time
Cause if i could i would
i would Leave you behind

Cause and the end
I wish i would have listing
Cause they was right about you
You was just after one thing



True Story............Nikki

I don't believe the words "they was just hating" belong in poetry.

what is you trying to say


It not a poem Its just something i was writing ok

I is trying to say I don't like it.

WHATEVER I don't care what you think a

what ur trying to say is good , but u put it in a bad way with bad grammar .......
im not criticizing you , this is just the beginning for you ...u have to improve your grammar ..:)

I think the poem itself is OK. But the grammar isn't too good with a few spelling mistakes and word choice isn't of the best quality. Maybe look over it with a dictionary and you could improve.

Yeah, i agree with everyone. The grammer really sucks, but i like the context of the writing. try working on using correct english.

im Not someone who write poems I writes song So like what in the poem need to be changed in sorry to say everything was Spelled right



Im a Singer Not a Poem Write like that

Originally posted by Ima_princess02


Im a Singer Not a Poem Write like that

no your not a singer your a nothing.

Bitch how u going to say what i am i tell you about female

Your right. your not a nothing. your an idiot.

Girl Please stop talking shit Girl sit down

do you read what you say?

im male btw

I think ur poem was good. It had meaning. And if that's how u write do da DAMN thang dont listen to all these people who talkin bout you needa learn how to spell cuz its not like we in english class or something. So yall needa CALM THAT DOWN!

C/08 MIAMI's FINEST

MiAsSxyBabyGirl ---Thanks girl.......You write poems ....But yea thank you they act like it something big or something i was just writing what i feel everything i write Is A true Story ..I don't know about thim making up shit

But that other girl that keep talking shit ain't gone move shit BItch do you look at what you say Blood

I don't give a shit about your spelling. I told you my thoughts.

Originally posted by MiAsSxyBabyGirl
dont listen to all these people who talkin bout you needa learn how to spell cuz its not like we in english class or something. So yall needa CALM THAT DOWN!

Spelling does matter in poetry. Pity, eh?

Gramatically, it needs work. But the meaning was definately heartfelt, and I can relate. Been there, done that.

Good Luck and God Bless,
Carrie

Girl i dont' give a **** what you was gaving bitch damn



And thanks to the other girl