Heres one of my poems and one of my friend

Heres mine

A Window by Allison AKA B/T

I walk through a open door to seea dark despairing room and in this room I look to see

The glowing light straight in front of me

I look out a window hoping to see away out of this life

I take white paint and put it on my face I paint my lips black and paint black tears beneath my eyes I take a knife

And press upon my skin as the blood pours down to the floor

The light disappears from this room I trun around to leave this dakr place but to my despair there is no door

With the paint upon my skin and the bood flowing down

I don't look like anyone not even me I can not be found

The window is still there but there is no light

As I look out this window I see just a black night

As black as my tears

As dark as my fears

My blood continues to pour

Down to my feet down to the floor

As the blood flows from me veins my body gets weak

I feel so bad I can't even speak

I'm still looking out a window to see a cold black night I fall to the floor

As the blood continues to pour

Everything goes dark I don't have the strenght to see

Everything goes dark I can't even see the door right in front of me

I look out a window as the glowing light shines on me

I close my eyes as the last thing Ill do

I close my eyes but I can still see straight through

I think to myself I found my way out Ill finally be free

As I liy here I'm finally happy

Then I die I fade away

Although the sun will rise I won't see the day




and heres one of my friends poems



I am a vampire by George AKA big G



I am a vampire I hunt humans by night

Blood is my poison not that awful coke light

I sleep in a coffin so you can't hear me snore

Dracula and other fakes they really start to bore

I dress all in black as is fashionable in clubs

I much prefer such places they have crucifixes in pubs

Garlic doesn't bother me as I love a good herb bread

Italian sauce large pizza or a bloody humans head

I can't fly all that well as I haven't really quite learnt

And sometimes I forget it's sunrise and get my nose burnt

Yeah deaths a drag but sometimes it's fun

Partying all night like a student never seeing the sun

But the only real problem with life eternal

Is not being able to go high street shopping that's infernal




Well I hope you like

I liked the first one best, your one. It painted the most amazing picture in my head, I could see it all. i love how you wrote it, the style, etc. But at the beginning, some lines were rather long. Still awesome though, I'd love to read more of your poetry.

This poem was inspired after a friend of mine just ignored me and pretended not to notice me anymore one day and became pally with another girl.

What we where
Last term
You where my good friend
You walked everywhere with me
You where always there for me

But now
What we where
Does not exist anymore
Suddenly she took my place

I did'nt ask u to abandon me
Alone suddenly with no-one to turn to
Everyday i wonder
Why you left me like that

I see the two of you together
I wonder why you left me like that
It drives me insane, It maddens me
What did i do wrong ?

Was i not good enough for you?
Or did you friend her cos she was ur skin colour
Like the other girls

I can't move on if you dun tell me why
Cos what we where does not exist anymore

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