Here's a poem I made awhile back. What do you guys think?

The Shadow


The lightning crackles, thunder booms
In the distance, buildings loom
Drink, my friend, and drink it fast
For it will be your last
The shadow is coming, fast and faster
Looking for an eternal master
Sit at home and read a book
But watch out, the shadow hides in every nook
Try to escape on a boat at sea
No, the shadow will get you, as it did me
In a dark alley, you make your last stand
The shadow confronts you, and puts out a hand
You're gone, there's nothing you can do about it
Your life is unlit

It gets to the point which I like. The whole shawdow thing is kind of predictable.... but I guess it depends on how you want your poem to be read.... with a suprise ... or simply knowing what is altimetly going to be the outcome. I do like it from both points though. Good Job.

its a good poem, the main reason coz its short and snappy

i liked it.....

dark is always good...

thanks alot, all my friends like that one, so I decided to submit it here

That is a really good poem. Submit some of your other stuff, if it;s any way near as good.:D

Wow I wish I could write as good as you. This poem is very unique! ~Megan :)

I never read one like that but i really enjoyed it. Please post more like that one it lures you in and it shows how great of a writer you are.

luv,
s.j.

I like the meaning and the emotion behind it, but the rythm was a bit off.

Good Job and God Bless,
Carrie