Similar lyrics.
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Wait a bit longer.
I promise I'll stay up with you and
watch the darkness engulf
your soul.

You're words are sharper
than my razor kisses.
You left my paper heart
bleeding
until it soaked my
shirt.

So
let me stare into your eyes in hopes
that my eyes will
burn
a hole in your heart.
[looks can kill, darling]
Please comment on this.

cool cool

I like it, it's clean and to the point. The only thing is that I wish it were longer, but at the same time if it were longer it might take away from the sharp simplicity. Oh well. I say leave it as it is.