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xBlackxBloodx
09-04-2003, 01:59 AM
Alright here we go!!!!!

BLACK BLOOD

Moonlight creeps into my room
The air is thick with doom
This object grasped in my right hand
Looks quite beautiful and grand

My eyes go blind I cannot see
My soul is chained, un-free
My mind goes blank darkness takes me
My right hand moves with glee

The object falls to the floor
Someone screams, gNo more!h
To only find itfs me who screamed
My left arm starts to bleed

Black blood drips and flows quietly, staining the wooden floor
My head goes numb with shock as my contents are spilled some more
All goes black there is no light, only fire, ash and dust
The air is thick and musty, the very smell of rust

A feeling that Ifm familiar with starts behind my back
I fall hopeless to the ground a whip is heard with a crack
Demons are everywhere, laughing as they beat
Beating the newcomers, of this horrific keep

Cries of pain are heard, as I realize itfs just me
A slave I am, nothing more as the scars grow skin deep
More cackled laughter and cries of fear
More scars engraved and tears

The cell grows darker and drums are heard
Everything is twisted into a blur
The heart that I no longer have
Is filled with death and anger

My life is wasted, ripped and torn
Filled with nothing, but forlorn
Under a graveyard, inside hell
Is now forever my prison cellc

-Sandra (me)

Hope you liked it! I have two more if ur intrested!:p :) ;) :kill: :kill: :mob:

xBlackxBloodx
09-04-2003, 02:09 AM
*waiting*

My Psychosis
09-04-2003, 02:32 AM
wonderful another unimaginative poem about self mutilation