its everything.
(its nothing)
everythign is impossible...
with me.
this broken body
-useless shell-
left behind as a reminder
of what i could have been,
of what we could have been...
but i just had to go
and be me
(and that was never good
enough, now was it?).
so hey...
welcome to the fucking club.


this sucks, but i dont care. comment as you will, ill defend it as i can. im just in a pissy mood and i need to vent

don't be pissy...........suck on my junk!

i like the idea and it doesn't suck. i feel like a first class screw up all the time. i'm a long time member in the club, but one thing i can't understand: why the contridiction in the first two lines, " its everything (its nothing). i just dont feel its fits because it causes me to question if u mean the opposite u say in the entire poem. i dont know maybe i'm just really tired and this all makes no sense. anyway write more for me to read and comment on

Originally posted by don
i'm a long time member in the club, but one thing i can't understand: why the contridiction in the first two lines, " its everything (its nothing). i just dont feel its fits because it causes me to question if u mean the opposite u say in the entire poem.

supposed to be a kind of hidden double meaning. when said aloud, it would be like "its everything and nothing"...meaning everything about em and nothing in particular. but it also has the double meaning of it really being "(nothing)", as in, not really a big deal, but more read into, more exaggerated than it should be.

apply that hidden meaning principle to most things i put in parentheses, thats usually the way i mean it. sorry if this one was confusing

it's one of those, ''hey! eff you!'' kinda poems.

blunt and honest, with a touching edge.

i like it.

but what else is new?

I admit, my initial reaction to it was disappointment, but only because I have grown to expect so much of you as a writer. I am used to your pieces hitting me way closer to home than I am comfortable with most of the time, and this one didn't have that some depth of sincerity and relation to it.

Still, on second examination, it is a piece that I do appreciate. Just not the level I anticipate from you.

Originally posted by UnicornDream
I admit, my initial reaction to it was disappointment, but only because I have grown to expect so much of you as a writer. I am used to your pieces hitting me way closer to home than I am comfortable with most of the time, and this one didn't have that some depth of sincerity and relation to it.

Still, on second examination, it is a piece that I do appreciate. Just not the level I anticipate from you.

like i said, this was more of a vent.

ill try better next time, i promise :)

Everyone vents and it was well done venting btu i ahvent read alot of your stuff so im not sure what kind of writer you are but i am looking forward to reading more of your writings